Through a series of events I ended up submitting a script for a comic book to an independent publisher. While I have always harbored the desire to write comic books I have not been actively trying to do so due to time constraints and other considerations.
The process was a real learning experience as my thought was to layout some of the direction and settings for the story (as though I’m writing to the artist). I was told to strip it down and tell the story as cleanly and quickly as possible.
Ultimately it was rejected, but done so nicely that I think we can still be friends. All sarcasm aside, it was done nicely and it was all something of a set of happenstances, but I do like the story and thought I would share it.
The Soul of a Zombie
Page One (Six panels)
Danny is waking up in bed, his wife is already gone.
Caption: Another morning.
Danny is getting ready for work.
Danny is coming down the stairs.
Caption: I like my life. Mornings I sometimes hate.
Danny is sitting down to breakfast with his wife and daughter. His wife is wearing a distinct ring.
Danny hits the front door kissing his wife good-bye.
Danny “Don’t forget date night tonight.”
Danny is driving into work.
Caption: It’s too nice a day to work.
Page Two (Six panels)
Danny arrives at walk and is walking down an aisle of cubes.
Danny stops at his boss’ office.
Danny: “Sorry I’m a little late.”
Boss: “No problem, I’m just glad you showed up.”
Danny scans the office.
Danny: “Everyone sick?”
Boss: “So they say.”
Danny looking outside. Coughs.
Danny: “Can I be sick to?”
Danny’s sitting as his desk. A picture of his wife and daughter sits on his desk.
Danny is driving back home.
The car radio “CDC has raised the alert level about this recent flu epidemic.”
Page Three (Four panels)
Danny and his daughter are playing in the back yard.
Danny and his family at the dinner table.
Caption: At times it seems like I have a perfect life.
Danny and his wife are putting their daughter to bed.
Danny and his wife are watching TV.
Danny “Its date night.”
Page Four (Two panels)
Danny and his wife in bed after sex.
Danny is in the bathroom, coughing up blood.
Wife: “Danny; Are you okay?
Page Five (One panel)
Top of Page: One year later:
Danny is a zombie.
Caption: They call us the walking dead, zombies.
Page Six (Six panels)
Danny is joins a group of zombies.
Caption: They call us that because we appear to all tests to be dead.
The group is moving into the street and joining other zombies.
Caption: Our bodies are decaying and we can’t speak, but we are here, or at least I am.
The group moves to a barricaded wall. Guards are atop the makeshift wall.
Caption: I remember when they pulled the plug on me.
More zombies are joining and are all heading for the wall.
Caption: The doctor told my wife the slight brainwave function meant nothing I was dead.
The zombies attack and the humans begin to shot their weapons at them.
Caption: I wish to God, they understood what has happened to us.
The zombies are starting to break thru the wall.
Caption: We are alive in a sense, but trapped inside a living engine of hunger with no way to control it.
Page Seven (Four panels)
The barrier break, the fighting intensifies.
Caption: I sit inside this thing I wish I could go mad.
Zombies are overrunning the compound and the humans are scattering.
Caption: I pray for a head shot they may finally kill me.
Danny with a small group is chasing after some humans, which includes a woman and a young girl running into a building.
Caption: Why I remain sane as I am eating human flesh is itself maddening.
Danny’s zombie group follows into the house and is hit by gun fire from a hand gun.
Caption: But I’m still here, inside and I wonder how many others are still sane and suffering.
Page Eight (Two panels)
Danny and one other zombie approach the humans. The gun clicks empty and we see it is Danny’s wife and child.
Caption: This can’t be happening. Please let me go mad, I need my mind to break. I need this to end, I can’t be this. I can’t be doing this.
Danny is eating is wife’s hand, we see her ring. It almost appears as if Danny is crying.
Caption: Arghhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh! (an unending scream)
And there you have it. There are so many elements to writing something even this simple that you don't realize until you start to do it, but for me pacing is a huge key and I had three of four ideas of how to do it. You should see my first shot at the script and see how much more was in it and I thought that was light. This is stripped down to its bones, but it does allow someone to read the story and determine if they want to go forward with it or not. It was a lot of fun just trying my hand at it and the people behind it who pushed me I have to say thanks. I can see why it is very difficult for a writer to break into this business. One day I would like to take another stab at this stuff.